The Official Writing Challenge
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05/24/12
Thank you for this story. It was a wonderful read, and filled with beautiful meanings. God bless~
This is a delightful devotion. Your timing is perfect as I really needed to hear these words right now.

The only thing I might suggest is to avoid phrases like "the most vulnerable suffer the most." I'd leave out the first most because the word vulnerable is descriptive on its own.

I also enjoyed how you compared the Biblical lesson to modern times. By using yourself as an example it came off as caring and trusting instead of preachy. You nid a nice job with this piece.
Congratulations for placing 6th in level one!