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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Risk (05/17/12)

TITLE: Paulie the Risk Taker
By Tiara Huffman


Paulie was a risk taker! He loved to swing as high as he could and jump off, he always claimed up to the tippy top of the trees. He would stack his books big and tall and reach for the toy on the sky-high shelf were mommy put his toys when they were in time-out. He only did things if there was a little risk involved. He liked seeing how high he could go without getting hurt, if he could get those toys he wasn’t supposed to have without mommy knowing. It often got Paulie in trouble. But to him that was okay, because he was learning that it was okay to slide down the slide, just not face first. And that getting the toy when mommy put it up was not okay, and poking a beehive with a stick was not only bad, but it was not a good idea! Bees hurt!

Paulie felt bad for mommy sometimes, because every time he took a risk, it made his mommy scared, mad, and sometimes she even cried. Paulie would go and give his mommy hugs and kisses and tell her just how sorry he was when she cried. One day when Paulie had done something real bad, and his mommy was crying Paulie gave his mommy a kiss and said, “Mommy I’m sorry I take risks, I know it scares you.” His mommy kissed him and said, “It is okay baby, I should have known you were going to be a risk taker, I did name you after a risk taker.” Paulie’s eyes grew big. “You did!” he said excited. His mommy smiled big. “I did Paulie,” she said pushing back Paulie’s hair, and then Paulie wiped away his mommy’s tears. “You want me to tell you about him?” Paulie’s mommy asked him. Paulie nodded his head so fast it made his eyeballs hurt.

“Okay,” his mommy said with a laugh. And then Paulie’s mommy told him all about a man named Paul that went all over telling people about Jesus even though, doing so could get him in big trouble. But even when Paul was in trouble, he wasn’t afraid, because Jesus had told him to go tell people about him. And mommy also told Paulie about how Paul had been caught and taking to prison four times! And he still kept telling people about Jesus! Paul was a great man of God! Paulie wanted to be like that! Paulie decided he wasn’t going take risks with high places and bees anymore; he was going to take risks telling people about Jesus! Now, Paulie the risk taker, takes risks for Jesus!

Author’s note: Inspiring verse: men who have risked their lives for the name of our Lord Jesus Christ. Acts 15:26 NIV. From the passage “The Council’s Letter to Gentile Believers.”

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C D Swanson 05/24/12
This was a cute story and brought a good message forward. Nicely done. I loved the wrap up with the scripture. Thank you.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/25/12
I absolutely love this piece. Paulie is quite the character and he charmed his way into my heart.

Be careful with run-on sentences and incomplete ones. At first I thought some of the sentence structure needed polishing but as I read I liked it because it helped me to relate to the little guy even more.

Make sure you capitalize Mommy when used as a name (When it doesn't have a my, his, or the in front)

The ending was a touch of genius. I didn't see it coming at all. You did an outstanding job writing on topic while still delivering a powerful message.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/31/12
Congratulations for placing 10th in level one! Happy Dance!