The Official Writing Challenge
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05/24/12
This was a lovely testimonial of your niece. Praise God...I am so pleased of the outcome of her life, and how God moved in it.

I enjoyed it so much. How wonderful she found her way back to Jesus...This was a joy to read. I love reading testimonies. Thank you.

God bless~

This is a great story of tough love parenting. You grabbed my attention immediately.

I like the letter writing idea as it might be something one would write but it limited you on show don't tell.

I enjoyed the MC immediately and wanted to know more about her. I bet you could polish it and make it into a YA novel.
05/30/12
I loved this entry! The letter sounds just like a young girl would talk. I was engaged from start to finish.

The letter form does limit the action. Perhaps the young girl could intersperse some dialogue between she and her parents, or between the new friends. Allude to more of the conflict that brought her there in conversation, perhaps.

Very well done and right on target.
Congratulations for placing 12th in level one!