The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a good story. You did a nice job describing the chores and trials of motherhood. On days when we are just about ready to run away, they do something precious to make it all worthwhile. I think God programmed cute into kids for just that reason. :)

Make sure when someone different is speaking that you start a new paragraph for each speaker, even if it's just one or two words. Also the ending seemed a bit abrupt. I know it's hard with the word count. What I try to do is just write the story and not look at the word count, then go back and clip unnecessary words or phrases.

Overall you did a nice job and stayed right on topic. Though the message was squeezed in at the end it still came through loud and clear. No matter how bad life is there is always someone who has it tougher and seems to handle it with more grace. The truth is God gives us different gifts to handle different situations. Your story certainly showed that. Many mothers couldn't dream of having twins and the work that goes into it. Nicely done.
05/12/12
This was a pure delight to read on so many levels. I felt it was a well written entry, and it held my attention. It also had a pertinent message at the end.

I loved it. Thanks.

God Bless,

Camille~
Congratulations for placing 10th in level one!