The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a lovely piece and a nice take on the topic. It's true that people can become spirituality weary.

You had some little minor things to tweak like a capital at the beginning of a quote and doldrums instead of dull drums, though I kind of like that it makes a visual picture that makes the points.

You did a nice job with this and the dialog feels more natural. Keep writing those stories that God puts on your heart. :)
05/12/12
I loved this! And I loved the ending. Great job and wonderful way of presenting the topic in an ingengious fashion, while bringing forth a powerful message.

Thank you.

God bless,

Camille~