The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. You pulled me in quickly and grabbed my interest all the way through.

There are a few spots that need polishing with the punctuation and typos. I really liked the ending of all the residents gathering around. The one statement from the man saying you don't need to worry about us M'am seemed a little forced almost as if it were from a cowboy movie.
;)Just tweaking that a tiny bit and you have an outstanding story that is so on topic. It's also filled with many messages, depending where the reader is coming from. You did a spectacular job on this one.
Wonderful story, well written and on topic. Gives us hope that people will care. Good job!
This story brings an infinite amount of hope and appeal to the reader, as it addresses the issues of abuse. It was well written, on topic...and brought the topic to a powerful close with the community standing up for what is right.

Excellent story. I loved it.

Thank you.

God Bless,

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