The Official Writing Challenge
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05/11/12
This is so beautiful. Often poetry doesn't sink in my thick head as well as fiction but your words just grabbed my heart and I could feel hope soaring around me.

The only things I might suggest and they are just my opinion is that you might want to balance it a tad more. I liked how Jesus is the answer to all the things we are weary of, but I'm afraid that some people may skim over the second part if they feel it is saying the same thing over and over and I would hate to have anyone miss your beautiful ending. I got goosebumps when I read the last line and could see life with new eyes. You did an outstanding job with this one.
05/12/12
WOW - This was amazing! I loved it. I really cannot say much more than that.

Clearly, you are a very talented writer, who, like many in here,"loves God."

Thank you.

God Bless,
Camille~
05/17/12
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 1!