The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/05
Nice work, although I would have like to have seen a little more of your thoughts. God bless ya, littlelight
11/01/05
You wrote some very good truths and thoughts! Nice job. You may want to drop the 'So' at the beginning of your sentences. :)
11/01/05
First paragraph bothered me with so many 2nd. person references, then it shifted to "hard" first person. Very nice comment overall. Thanks for posting.
11/02/05
There are a few problems with sentence structure here, but I really like the idea of smelling like burning leaves for the Savior!