The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a fresh take on the topic. You did a great job pulling me into the story.

The only red ink I have is there were some spots that needed a comma and a missing quotation mark.

I felt like I was invading on some private conversation I wasn't meant to hear. The characters and the MC's thought felt so very real. I also liked the ending. Often writers feel they need to have a happy ending I personally prefer realistic ones. You did a fantastic job beginning to end.
05/12/12
Fantastic job in describing the MC's thoughts. I really liked the entire piece, and it rang true with how the boss handled the dismissal.
It is usally on a Friday, so as not to have any "incidents."

Great job with this. I pray she finds a job soon.

God Bless,

Camille~
05/16/12
I really like this alot, I've never been fired, but I cant relate to that feeling of helplessness. Good Job