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05/03/12
This held a beautiful message about family ties and the true meaning of being "rich." It was a very good story, the only thing I spotted...and perhaps it was done intentionally...was the description of the house.
At first it "had no windows or doors" and then "the mom used old army blankets to cover the windows and doors."

But, perhaps it was meant as an "intial shock through the child's eyes" and therefore it was embellished. Other than that minor issue, it was a very touching piece. And my heart goes out to you for sharing this story.

Thank you. God Bless~
05/05/12
A touching story that I can identify with. The emotions are very well expressed through the child's eyes. I wondered about the no windows and doors thing too.

Nicely done and on topic. Good job.

I loved riding on the "back shelf" looking at the stars when I was a kid. Thanks for helping me remember that.
Great story! Very visual writing.
This is a lovely walk down memory lane and I am grateful that you took me with you. It's amazing how time can change the way we see things. This was a bittersweet piece that was right on topic