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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Rich (04/26/12)

TITLE: So Rich
By Laura Chambers
04/28/12


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It doesn't seem real so I'm going to hide
Pretend that I'm sleeping, not dying inside
Thinking of what we will never get to do
My heart can't take anymore, it's still holding you
But it's filling with holes
Like the one that you fell through

Chorus:
There's a hole in my arms where you used to lay
A hole in my heart where I carried you all day
And I never knew what I had
Until I lost it
There's a hole in my vision where I once saw you
And a hole in my soul where it's tearing in two
How could I not have known
I was so rich?

I reached for a straw but it broke in my hands
Again, in an instant, goodbye to my plans
God seems so silent, or maybe He's gone
Dead as the hopes that I once relied on
Draining away out the very same holes
Where I already lost you

Chorus

Everybody's trying to wake me from slumber
But everything that matters is buried deep under
The very same soil where they say seeds are planted
I dig and I dig but come out empty-handed

All that I want is you back

Chorus

I was so rich
So rich
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This lyric was inspired by Denise Hildreth Jones' book "The First Gardener" (not completely)


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Camille (C D) Swanson 05/03/12
I have the music going in my head...with a piano the primary piece! Beautiful and powerful. Thanks.

God Bless~
Jody Day 05/05/12
Beautiful and on topic. I enjoyed this piece.
Kristine Baker05/05/12
Very nice!!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/06/12
This says so much in so few words. I know that hole feeling, I think we all have experienced grief in one way or another. You did it quite elegantly
Laury Hubrich 05/06/12
Reading this poem reminded me of a dream I had last night. I had almost forgotten it.

I hope you get to sing this. Very nice job.
Graham Insley 05/07/12
Very powerful. I love the 'falling through' the holes in the heart. So expressive.
Colin Swann05/07/12
Good job and on topic. I too would like to hear it sung. KEEP WRITING!
Amanda Brogan05/07/12
God seems so silent, or maybe He's gone
Dead as the hopes that I once relied on
Draining away out the very same holes
Where I already lost you


The deep emotion of this piece rings out through every beautiful, heart-wrenching lyric. The part that I quoted above really touches me, because I think it eloquently portrays how most people feel, at least at first, whenever they lose someone that they dearly love. They feel that since their loved one is gone, perhaps God has left them as well. How wonderful to know that no matter what (or who) we lose or how low we get, our God will never leave us.

Inspiring! Very well done!
Dannie Hawley 05/08/12
Nicely done. I trust the Lord will provide an inspired score of music, too.
lynn gipson 05/08/12
This is excellent poetry...Im a novice but I got it completely. loved it.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/14/12
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level one!