The Official Writing Challenge
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05/03/12
As it has been said by Jesus "It is much easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle than for a rich man to enter the kingdom of God."

You were on topic and and your entry held meaning in the true biblical sense.

Thank you . God Bless~
05/04/12
On target with the subject and an interesting article.

I really feel you need to work on your word choice to make sentences flow better. An example is the first sentence 'Studying the difference...' Would read better if you said 'I have been studying...'

Only my thoughts; please feel free to ignore them.

I enjoyed your point and think it was well made.
05/05/12
Yes, I do agree:) This article is on topic and makes good points.

The sentence structure is a little awkward but this is easily corrected with practice. All caps are not necessary.

Good job!
Welcome to the writing challenge! I agree that sentence structure may need a little polish.

You were on topic. Good luck!
This is an interesting essay and I can tell you put a lot of passion into it.

Make sure you get a good proofreader who can help you polish your work before you submit. For example, the most powerful sentence in a piece is the first one. That's your chance to draw the reader in, however yours is an incomplete sentence.

You make some great points, I wished you had expanded on some of them because I was eager to read more. How wonderful and blessed we are that Jesus does reach out to the unclean for we all are unclean but once we ask him into our hearts our sins are washed away.
05/06/12
Very passionate! Thank you