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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Donít Look Back (04/19/12)

TITLE: Afternoon Thoughts
By Lori Shannon
04/26/12


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Afternoon Thoughts

Crisp autumn raindrops punctuate the cold.
Arthritic stalks snap in the dismal day.
Black branches creak like bones depressed and old,
And matted grass sleeps hopeless, spent, and gray.
Inside a farmhouse sits a lonely man
Rocking fading photos in his lap,
Reliving happy journeys when he can
Thoughts traced and folded like a well-worn map.
A muscle-clad, tanned youth stares out at him,
His first new tractor shining at his side,
And curly-headed girl, wide-eyed and slim,
Just sixty years ago, a doting bride.
His children clutching puppies grin with glee,
His first sight of the mountains, tall and proud
His son catching a pike as big as he...
The pain of moments lost intense and loud.
A tear that matches rain slides down his face
And stains the scenes already damp with tears.
He lights a match with perfect palsied grace
And sets aflame the past of fast-flown years.
Memories mirror only what we lack.
Our Savior gently tells us, ďDonít look back.Ē


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CD Swanson 04/26/12
Wow - Moving and powerful. Thank you for this well written entry that revealed and spoke volumes in a limited amount of words!

Great job. God Bless~
Catherine Maher04/26/12
Wonderful thoughts you have shared. I enjoyed this immensely. Maybe next time seperate it into stanzas or sections. Makes it easier to read.
Pam Ford Davis 04/27/12
This is beautiful...
So sad...
You have a real flare for writing!

Wing His Words!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/28/12
This is really lovely. I thought it was quite clever to use the photo album as a way of recounting history. Nicely done.
Nancy Bucca 05/03/12
You've drawn an absolutely beautiful picture here of the man in the rocker. What imagery! Congratulations!
Pam Ford Davis 05/03/12
FaithWriters hug!
Congratulations!

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Genia Gilbert05/03/12
Congratulations on your EC! Wonderful entry.
Ellen Carr 05/03/12
Really lovely, and also heart-wrenching, especially as he burns his photo memories. Well done and congratulations on your win!
Charla Diehl 05/10/12
This was such an enjoyable read as it painted such clear pictures in my mind of your MC and his photo album. Nice even flow throughout this poetic entry. Great job and I'm applauding your first placement and EC wins. I'll look forward to reading more of your entries.