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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Donít Look Back (04/19/12)

TITLE: Without Then
By Barbara Miller
04/25/12


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When I was young my Mother would say

Today is the Day the Lord hath made.

But that day was the day I got my first zit

And the next year was the year when the love bug bit.

Such trials, such heart break, when time would pass so slow

If only my future for me I could know.

The books, the school, my first burger flip job

Many a night my pitiful life would just lead me to sob.

When in my career I would succeed is when I would be happy indeed.

But what I did find was to put in the time made no better for a life sublime.

Then I saw him, and he saw me

He made me laugh, what I felt was pure glee.

We shared our vows, we kissed with lips, from that day on no more lost loves I'd miss.

My needs were gone, my heart was kept. Life was love and in our love was life.

Till a woman did enter his life and our bed. And for years I believed the lies that were said.

How could this be? What's was wrong with me? I had no more life. I wish I were dead.

I had loved so strong and I had loved so long. And yet this life's love had somehow gone wrong.

This is the day the Lord hath made? How could I be glad or rejoice when so sad?

Lord, oh Lord, who am I to be? I thought till now it was wife I would be.

Oh daughter, oh daughter, my treasure in you you don't see. You've borrowed your worth without asking me. To understand this we must walk hand in hand, and trust me your life in my care for your plan.

For when you look back it is with relief you must see, because if what was then was not then, what we have today we would not be.


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CD Swanson 04/26/12
Oh my- this simply was in one word - beautiful. I loved the entire piece, it flowed smoothly and it held such a powerful message.

Excellent job. God Bless~
Catherine Maher04/26/12
You borrowed your worth without asking me....that's my favorite line and it's a gem. Wonderful job here. Smile, because you penned a beauty. thank you
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/28/12
This is a powerful saga that leads the reader through out the MC's ups and downs. I could really relate. The only thing I might mention is you had a few words that should be one word like heartbreak. Also since you used some punctuation, there were spots early on that needed a comma. I think you did a great job of writing on topic. The words made my heart hurt at times. I remember writing several I wish I were dead type poems. It's a wonderful, healthy way to rid your mind of such thoughts and allow the Spirit to soothe your heart.