The Official Writing Challenge
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04/26/12
Oh my- this simply was in one word - beautiful. I loved the entire piece, it flowed smoothly and it held such a powerful message.

Excellent job. God Bless~
You borrowed your worth without asking me....that's my favorite line and it's a gem. Wonderful job here. Smile, because you penned a beauty. thank you
This is a powerful saga that leads the reader through out the MC's ups and downs. I could really relate. The only thing I might mention is you had a few words that should be one word like heartbreak. Also since you used some punctuation, there were spots early on that needed a comma. I think you did a great job of writing on topic. The words made my heart hurt at times. I remember writing several I wish I were dead type poems. It's a wonderful, healthy way to rid your mind of such thoughts and allow the Spirit to soothe your heart.