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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Donít Look Back (04/19/12)

TITLE: DON'T LOOK BACK
By Ramona Cook
04/25/12


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She walked out of the building with her black back pack in hand. The light was grayed as in the time of twilight.

A white car was waiting, and walking over to it she would have taken a seat in the back behind the driverís seat; she would have except for the man that opened the driverís door and motioned for her to sit in the driverís seat.

After closing the door he went to the rear of the car and opened the hatchback. He placed a piece of black velvet over the window of the hatchback and closed it.

Walking back to the driverís door he raised his right hand and pointed ahead as if to say, ďDonít look behind you. Look ahead!Ē

Reflecting on this dream it was clear that He was saying to her, ďThere is nothing in your past that you can relive today. Everything alive is ahead of you.Ē

It is true that none of the good or the bad experiences in yesterday can be lived in today, except in the mind.

We are unable to change anything from yesterday. We may be enabled about wiser living and choices for today from yesterdayís experiences, but yesterday is gone.

In the years to come she would have many times to recall the instruction, those times when the sorrow of loss painfully presented itself again in her today.

ďDonít look back! Look ahead!Ē you can hear her say, and focusing ahead, she lives with promise that all she has lost of value is living just ahead in her future.


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CD Swanson 04/26/12
Short and to the point...clever and powerful. I feel God does use dreams at times to illustrate things of importance and significance. Good job here, I loved it.

God Bless~
CD Swanson 04/26/12
Short and to the point...clever and powerful. I feel God does use dreams at times to illustrate things of importance and significance. Good job here, I loved it.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/28/12
This is short but gets right to the point. It is such a valuable lesson. One many of us need to be reminded over and over again.

You may want to be careful not to have too long of a sentence in a short story. Also, if you can, try to not use the verb was but instead switch it for an active verb. For example in this sentence --
A white car was waiting, and walking over to it she would have taken a seat in the back behind the driverís seat; she would have except for the man that opened the driverís door and motioned for her to sit in the driverís seat.
You can tighten that sentence up by doing something like this- She walked over to the waiting, white car, preparing to take a seat behind the driver. Then he stepped out and motioned for her to sit in the driver's seat.
I hope that gives you an idea of what I'm trying to say.

I really enjoyed this message. I joke that I'm the gold medalist of worrying and it's nice to be reminded. I also thought it was good to put in the part about becoming wiser. that is something I haven't thought of before. Nice job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/03/12
Congratulations for ranking 14th in level one!