The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 444 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
04/26/12
Short and to the point...clever and powerful. I feel God does use dreams at times to illustrate things of importance and significance. Good job here, I loved it.

God Bless~
04/26/12
Short and to the point...clever and powerful. I feel God does use dreams at times to illustrate things of importance and significance. Good job here, I loved it.

God Bless~
This is short but gets right to the point. It is such a valuable lesson. One many of us need to be reminded over and over again.

You may want to be careful not to have too long of a sentence in a short story. Also, if you can, try to not use the verb was but instead switch it for an active verb. For example in this sentence --
A white car was waiting, and walking over to it she would have taken a seat in the back behind the driverís seat; she would have except for the man that opened the driverís door and motioned for her to sit in the driverís seat.
You can tighten that sentence up by doing something like this- She walked over to the waiting, white car, preparing to take a seat behind the driver. Then he stepped out and motioned for her to sit in the driver's seat.
I hope that gives you an idea of what I'm trying to say.

I really enjoyed this message. I joke that I'm the gold medalist of worrying and it's nice to be reminded. I also thought it was good to put in the part about becoming wiser. that is something I haven't thought of before. Nice job.
Congratulations for ranking 14th in level one!