The Official Writing Challenge
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04/26/12
This was excellent! I loved it...everything from the messages each MC had, to the overall feeling and mood of this piece. I loved how the young lady wrote a note of apology and was forgiven.

I simply adore happy endings. My kind of story.

Thank you. God Bless~
This is a good story. I liked how you showed the conflict.

My only suggestion would be in a story of 750 words, you might want to be careful not to have too many characters. There isn't enough words to develop them all and I found myself stumbling over who was who.

You did a great job writing on topic. I did enjoy the message. It's amazing how God provides opportunities for us. The ending was good too. I wondered if he would forgive her or kick her out. I'm happy that he forgave.