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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Donít Look Back (04/19/12)

TITLE: Jersey Waves
By Catherine Maher
04/25/12


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Jane had traveled to the ocean twice a week for the past year since moving back home. Fond, childhood memories washed over her each time she saw the Jersey waves. She could practically navigate the drive blindfolded. Feelings of joy would always bubble over as she headed out to soak up more sun and visit shops along the boardwalk. Today, waves of sadness welled up in black tears that overflowed down her blanched cheeks. Making it difficult to see the yellow dashes, she swerved in and out, fighting to stay in her lane. In the rear view-mirror she spotted a police car with lights and siren screaming at her to pull over.

Oh no, I must look a mess. He'll think I've been drinking.

Reaching for a tissue, Jane dabbed her face, trying to ready herself for the interrogation. Taking a deep breath, she eased up on the pedal. Much to her surprise, the black and white flew around her to chase the real culprit.

Oh....oh my goodness. He wasn't coming for me at all.

With a huge sigh of relief, Jane saw her exit and veered off toward the ramp. Finding a space close to the shops, she put it in park and killed the engine. Firmly planted on the leather upholstery, she leaned forward to peer through the wide glass. After several failed attempts to spot him, she leaned back, closed her eyes and prayed silently.

Lord, You have helped me every step of the way. When I had to cancel wedding plans, You comforted me. When I discovered stolen money and deception, You showed me truth. When the pain of Michael's betrayal was drowning me, You lifted me up. Now, please help me find him today so I can say my final good-bye.

The last time she had seen him, they were sitting in the car trying to work out their problems. She knew he had been dishonest with her on more than one occasion, but still, she'd wanted to give him a chance to come clean. Not that it would've changed anything, but she had to know if he were ever the man she thought he was. That night, she'd shot her questions in rapid fire as he stumbled for answers. In her heart, she believed he was probably lying again.

He rambled on trying to convince her that he was a new person. He began to change, before her eyes, as if she'd put on new glasses. Rubbing her eyes, she'd wondered what she was actually seeing. His voice was muffled, like he'd stepped outside the car and the windows were up. Jane had watched, as the ordinary man she had thought she knew, transformed into something hideous with blackened eyes and a devilish grin. Swallowing hard, she had asked one last question.

"Did you do all this because you don't know how to love, or are you evil?"

The shadowy creature of a man peered back in silence. That day Jane saw, what the Bible calls, a wolf in sheep's clothing. From that revelation, she had gotten her answer.

Shifting her attention back to the boardwalk, she finally spotted him walking past an arcade.

There he is! I see him! Thank You, Lord. Help me now, and give me your peace and strength to follow through.

Throwing the car door open, Jane called out, running all the while toward him.

"Michael, Michael, I want to tell you ...."

He turned to greet her and she saw his true nature for a second time. With no doubt remaining, she said her goodbye and in one swift turn, left him standing there. False dreams of love were swept away and a new resolve to follow the Lord took their place.

Chanting to the rhythm of her flip-flops hitting the boards, Jane hurried to the car. Don't look back! Don't look back! Remember Lot's wife and the pillar of salt. Once on the road, fresh waves of peace guided her safely home to begin the healing process. Friends rallied and God blessed her. She learned to trust the Lord with the future. She never forgot the wolf in sheep's clothing or the pillar of salt.


Beware of false prophets, which come to you in sheep's clothing, but inwardly they are ravening wolves. Ye shall know them by their fruits. Matthew 7:15, KJV
But his wife looked back from behind him and she became a pillar of salt. Genesis 19:26, KJV


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Camille (C D) Swanson 04/26/12
A brilliant story that holds significance in our world today. We are to be aware at all times; "Behold, I send you forth as sheep in the midst of wolves: be therefore wise as serpents, and harmless as doves." (Matthew 10:16 KJV)

The MC was just that, and the Lord gave her the eyes to see as she ran forward without looking back. I loved this. Thanks for this story that will stay with many long after they have finished reading it.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/26/12
This is a poignant story. I think many people will be able to relate to this. it's so tempting to follow what we think is best for us but so more important to allow God to take the lead. My eyes blurred for a second and I thought your title said Jesus Waves and now I smile because that would be a perfect title too. When we stray off the path Jesus waves us back to the straight and narrow road. I think God was sending me a special message through my blurry eyes and your trusting him to write this story.
Margaret Kearley 04/30/12
This is a really gripping story and very well written. I found it hard to stop reading once I had started. I loved the way you reminded us how God shows us His truth and His way as we seek Him and pray for His help and direction. Great story. Thankyou.
Allen Povenmire 04/30/12
I liked your piece and it certainly kept my interest right up to the end. Good use of subtlety throughout kept me wondering what the MC's mission was and why. I reread it to make sure I caught all the details. Very good.
Hiram Claudio04/30/12
You did an amazing job of bonding the reader to the MC right from the beginning. You made here a true heroine and had me cheering her on and wanting to give her a high five or a "you go girl!" A wonderful piece of writing and a great lesson on triumph through pain. Excellent work!
Joe Moreland04/30/12
This was a very compelling story. You painted great pictures of both your mc and your villain. And your plot held me throughout. To be honest, I had read several stories in a row, and was getting tired, but yours picked me up, held my attentiona and revitalized me. Great job.
Donna Wilcher04/30/12
I truly enjoyed reading this! I so admired your MC, who sought God for wisdom and revelation..and got it!

You've described what the Bible refers to as one of the Gifts of the Holy Spirit; The Discerning of spirits found in 1 Corinthians 12:10. The Holy Spirit will give us spiritual eyes (insight) to see, distinguish or discern evil spirits.

And when He does, you run just like your MC did!

Love it!

Laura Manley05/01/12
This story was truly a blessing. We MUST always look to the Lord for our answers, and your MC did just that. It was such a reminder of putting our faith where it belongs. Men will fail us...God will not!!! Thank you for writing this. It has more personal meaning than you can imagine.
Ada Nett05/01/12
I was drawn immediately into the story as my mind formed questions about the MC and why she was crying. I was compelled to read on to satisfy my curiosity and you led me step by step to a satisfying conclusion. Good job!
Cathy
lynn gipson 05/02/12
As a single woman I can almost see the man in this writing. Excellent, just riveting. I am also in the beginners level and I wish I could write like that..God Bless you.
Graham Insley 05/03/12
A very well told story that could easily be part of a much larger work. Maybe don't look back but look ahead and write it.

Well done.
Amanda Brogan05/03/12
Wow! I really loved this! Super job! Your descriptions and your story were well-crafted and flowed smoothly throughout. And, of course, a great message, especially when so many women today are lured and tricked by false love.

Thumbs up!
Amanda Brogan05/03/12
I knew this would place. :) Congratulations on getting third!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/03/12
Congratulations on your beautiful ribbon! I'm doing my Happy Dance!!!!!!!!!
Ellen Carr 05/03/12
Great story which drew me in and kept me reading. Congratulations on you 3rd place!