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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Don’t Look Back (04/19/12)
One day,soon,Jesus,we will go to be with You

You will come for Your Bride,out of the blue

Out of this world,into Your glory so new

Away from this life,in the twinkling of an eye

The trumpet will sound and we'll soar through the sky

We'll realize the promise of Your Word,so wonderful and true

As You call to us,Your beloved,out of the blue

The clouds will part and Your glorious face we'll see

Then out of our bodies,our souls will be set free

Until then,Jesus our King,we'll wait eagerly for You

For the day the archangel shouts and You call us out of the blue

Don't look back;He's coming for us

On a day amazing and so wonderous

Out of the blue,into Heaven's marvelous light

Where there will be no more suffering,misery or night
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C D Swanson 
04/26/12
This poem flowed easily and forms a lovely image by your descriptive verses.

Nice job. God Bless~
Catherine Maher
04/26/12
Great title for a great poem. Maybe use spaces a little better and break into sections. It would simply make it easier to read, that's all. Good job.
Margaret Kearley 
04/27/12
Great thoughts to focus on the second coming of the Lord Jesus Christ. Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
04/28/12
This is so lovely. It flows right off the tongue. I could easily see it on a sympathy card or even on a card for funerals where they give people hope.

You had a few issues with spacing. Sometimes there wasn't a space between commas and the next word. Hit preview before you hit submit and that will give you a chance to see how it looks to the reader. Though it was lovely, the don't look back line didn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem, more like you added it so it would be on topic. Some of the best on topic pieces are the ones that never mention the topic words. I think this one could have done that. I know before I've gotten nervous and wondered if I should add the topic words so it would fit.

All in all I thought it was a beautiful peace. poetry isn't my strongest genre but this had a nice rhythm to it and the rhymes were spot on. The message is beautiful. You did an excellent job of repeating Out of the blue. Sometimes repetition doesn't work, but in this case it worked perfectly.