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04/26/12
I really like the message in this, especially the part where you say that your mission is not to point out the failures in others but to point them to God. Good job!
04/26/12
Nice job with this entry...You were totally on topic and delivered a powerful message for the readers. I really enjoyed this. Thank you. God Bless~
04/26/12
This seems very honest and real to me. Many people could certainly relate to it. The message is good, and I enjoyed it.
I really enjoyed this. Your message is a perfect one for me right now. I love how God does that and am grateful for your obedience in writing this. The first line whacked me in the side and took my breath away. I'm working so hard to get to a point where I like myself. Some days I do okay and others I need reminding. God bless and thank you.
04/29/12
Interesting. You literally took the topic in a different direction and made your points well.

I would suggest reading over the piece for contradiction in words or thougts. 'That I never want to see again' contradicts your belief of the importance of looking back. If you look back, you WILL see the darkness again...thus the contradiction.

I would also suggest putting the opening sentence into the body of your piece. Your opening sentence usually gives an idea of what you'll be discussing, at least in non-fiction article; and is then supported by your conclusion.