The Official Writing Challenge
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04/20/12
Looks like a winner to me! The more I read, the more I smiled! If you were sharing the information audibly I'd respond with "Amen and Amen!" You mentioned daily devotionals; they are my first love in writing. If you are not already sharing your insights through that outlet, I hope you will. You have an open ear to God's message and there are multitudes who need encouragement and direction.

Wing His Words,
Pam
I really enjoyed this devotion. I absolutely loved the fact that you didn't start with the Ecclesiastes. I've read quite a few entries and many used that. (I see you did use it at the bottom but you really didn't need to because you did a great job of writing outside the box and being on topic)

I liked how the first part told a personal story of your life. When you switched from I to you, to me it felt a tad preachy. Others like that effect but personally I am drawn more when I identify with the author like you did in the beginning. This is just a personal preference though. If you had switched the you to I or me, it still would have made me think about every point but I wouldn't have felt like it was a lecture.

In actuality your piece is really good and I so related to the first half that the second part didn't bother me as much as it might have. You did a nice job summing it all up and coming full circle.
04/26/12
Congrats! God Bless~
Congratulations for placing 3rd in level one and 19th overall!