The Official Writing Challenge
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04/19/12
This is really lovely. It flowed so naturally.

The only things I might suggest would be break it into verses and double space to give the reader the important white space. Also at the end you may have wanted to reference the Bible verse where it says Jesus says the truth will set you free(John 8:32)

It was right on topic. I also thought it was quite clever how you often made three distinct things in some lines. Very nice.
04/22/12
Lovely rhythmical piece and so very true!

Wing His Words,
Pam
04/22/12
I like this take on the topic. We are indeed threefold beings, and it is good to keep that in mind. Our physical, mental, and spiritual elements are intricately intertwined and all play a part in who we are.
04/25/12
I liked this too. Great rhythm and easy to read....just add white space. Otherwise great.