The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet love story. I enjoyed it and could relate to the MC and his longing for his sweetheart.

You have a few minor things to fix like missing commas for example with phrases like In particular and for a Kansas farm boy, could both use a comma. You may also want to make the opening paragraph into two or three smaller ones to not overwhelm the reader.

All in all, you wrote a charming romance. You managed to capture the topic in her braid, as well as in the love they shared. The ending was great. I like the mysterious way you left it open ended. Nicely done.

I was captured from the start to the end the dog was a plus I enjoyed it.
This was a creative approach to the topic. You held my interest all the way through, and I enjoyed your entry.
Makes me wonder if we would all be better off if we only had one love in the world and one God to love in spirit. Great story.
I will not be a bit surprised if this shows up in the winners circle! I'm very impressed at your descriptive wording and story line. In short, this was a masterpiece!

Wing His Words!
Lovely story that tugs at the heart, just as you had wanted. Well done.
Absolutely wonderful story! Makes me feel as though you knew the subject very well. Keep have a gift.
Congratulations for placing 12th in level one!