The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet story and a sad one too. You did a nice job showing both sides. The ending was a tad predictable. I almost wish you had left out the mysterious stranger and just had the wink from Daddy, but that's just my thoughts. You did a great job on writing on topic. This is the first Valentine story so far too which is refreshing because there have been a lot of Easter stories.
04/13/12
I love your story. It was well written with good descriptive action and the dialogue seemed right on target. It brought back some memories of an incident that happened to a friend of mine. Very well written and enjoyable.
04/13/12
Wow - I got goosebumps with this story. The ending especially. I loved it. Great job, poignant...and powerful. I loved that there was "no caretaker" there. Angels are all around, and God can make things happen when you least expect Him to.

Great job. keep writing.

God Bless~
04/14/12
Very very good! Well written and pulls on the heartstrings.
Congratulations for ranking 12th in level one!