The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/05
This is a documented essay with commentary. The over documented style is hard to read. Lose the all caps, and it help your message be not as oppressive, there is a stong message here, the key is to get an audience to listen. Keep at it and you find a process to success. Note: I will post something soon about proper parenthetical documentation. blessings dub
10/31/05
It feels like you had a wee bit of a struggle getting the point across in your peice in the beginning. I had a hard time getting through the paragraph after the word definitions--then it seemed you picked up the pace afterwards. Nice work however--keep writing! God bless ya, littlelight
11/02/05
Serious messages that we need to pay attention to. Thanks for sharing.