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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Holiday (04/05/12)

TITLE: The Dumb Easter Bunny
By Ken Ebright
04/10/12


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The time clock beeped as the chefs, Wayne and Harvey clocked, in at the La Carselle Restaurant.

Harvey let out a deep breath. “Wayne, I can’t believe I have to work on Easter.”

Wayne snickered, "I am just glad I don't have to work that day. I was lucky, because it is a holiday that few people get their time-off request approved."

Harvey grabbed a few heads of lettuce out of the refrigerator. "You stink! How did you get Easter off?"

Wayne took a head of lettuce and started to chop it up. “I asked a month ago. There are a lot of people who wanted it off."

Harvey walked over and snatched salad bowls out of the cupboard. "I put in my request and it was rejected. I had already bought baseball tickets."

Wayne started to slice strips of carrots. "Sorry to hear that, Harvey."

Harvey rolled his eyes, "All this because of some dumb Easter Bunny fairy tale."

"Do you believe that's what all Easter is about?"

Harvey put lettuce into bowls "What else could it be about?"

Wayne momentarily stopped what he was doing and looked directly into Harvey's eyes. "It's about Jesus who died for our sins and rose again on Easter Sunday."

Harvey shook his head. "That’s another fairy tale that is perpetrated to get peoples money."

Wayne threw the carrot down on the cutting board. "It’s not a fairy tale! Jesus died for you. He loves you."

"Yeah right!" Harvey’s face turned red.

Wayne picked up the carrot again and started to dice it. "We have been friends since we were kids. Don’t you remember that I had a drug addiction?"

"Yes. "

Wayne smiled, "Jesus took away my addiction to drugs. He's real and he worked miracles in my life. He can change your life."

Harvey rolled his eyes, "It’s a pile of rubbish"

"I‘ll tell you what-- I'll work your shift for you, if you do me a favor."

"Okay, what’s that?"

Wayne's face glowed, "I want you to attend church with my sister. She needs a ride.

You'll be out in plenty of time to go to your baseball game."

"Wayne, why would you do that for me?"

"Because you're my friend."

Harvey picked up Wayne’s sister and went to church.

During the service, as the pastor preached, he picked up a stake, like the one that was nailed into Jesus hand. He looked into Harvey’s eyes and said, “Jesus paid the penalty for you.”

It made Harvey cry and he walked up to the altar in front of the pastor. They talked and he kneeled and trembled as he prayed to Jesus into his heart.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/12/12
This is a nice story and a good representation of how many people view the holiday. The very last sentence is a tad awkward. I think you meant he prayed and asked Jesus into his heart. But then when I stop and think about it I kind of like the phrasing He prayed Jesus into his heart. :)
Dannie Hawley 04/14/12
This is a nice reminder for all of us. We should be showing Jesus is alive in us, as your MC's did by letting his friend go to the game, not just telling the friend that Jesus loves him. Now, if you want to take it to the romance genre... the newly saved friend and the MC's sister? Okay, maybe not. Anyway, thanks for the article!
CD Swanson 04/14/12
Good job. I truly enjoyed the entire piece, and loved the powerful conclusion.

Thank you. God Bless~
Genia Gilbert04/14/12
Easter is a great time to find opportunities to talk about Jesus. Your article showed that and flowed nicely.
Bryan Rudolph04/15/12
Upside:
You made me see Harvey and Wayne exchange views with each other: great! You made me see the ride to church and Harvey’s subsequent surrender to Christ: great! The story is certainly interesting.

Downside:
The topic was used, but not explored. The title and story are not related sufficiently.

Rightside:
Looking forward to reading more entries from you, please keep going.
Nancy Bucca04/19/12
I love how you worked in all that slicing and dicing during the conversation. You got the message across clearly and skillfully.

The end did feel a little rushed, but I loved it.
Sometimes as the clock winds down it can be hard to fit into a story everything you'd really like to add. Yet all the main elements are there. I look forward to reading more.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/19/12
Congratulations for ranking 11th in level one! Happy Dance my friend!


   
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