The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/12
I enjoyed your breakdown of the different holidays. I would have preferred to see paragraph breaks between the different holidays. Also, when you use quotes, the punctuation (periods, etc.) go on the inside of the quote marks, not the outside. It is evident how much you love the Lord in how you have presented this offering of what the holidays mean to you.
04/13/12
This has some very good points. The punctuation needs a little work, but I can see your heart for God and your prayer life shining through this piece.
I like this. You did a nice job incorporating all of the holidays. At first, I thought it might be too much at first to include all of the holidays. Sometimes in a short piece it is better to just focus on one thing but you did a nice job of it. You at times seemed to be talking to the reader and other times to God. I really enjoyed the conversation with God. It's a nice way to show how you have an intimate relationship with God.
04/13/12
This was a clever way to incorporate the topic into an entry. I found it to be original and powerful...by addressing each holiday it allowed for a big impact on the reader. Good job.

God BLess~