The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 282 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
03/17/12
This is an "awwwwwww" story, one which you could read on and on and not get bored with the love shown between these two people. More relationships should be blessed with this kind of love. Your story was well written and read very smoothly.
Your story was delightful in its telling. One red mark might be the changing of the POV. It detracted from the clarity a bit. Generally, in a story of this short length only one persons thoughts can be conveyed. You can show a person's feelings through their dialogue or body movements. Still it was a good story, well done.
03/20/12
Tender words and touching story...
03/21/12
Awwwwww...So sweet and so good. I loved this entry. Thank you for this touching read. God Bless~
What a beautiful tribute to your mate. There's nothing so wonderful as being young and in love...sigh! God bless your marriage. May it flourish and grow in strength as the years go by.