The Official Writing Challenge
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03/10/12
Good job with the very familiar Biblical Character Gideon. Nicely done.

God BLess~
You really bought this familiar story to life. I could sense the conflict and feel the nerves.

You may want to double space between the paragraphs to give the reader white space. Also using contractions in the dialog and sometimes in the narrative to make the dialog and phrasing feel more authentic.

This is a nice devotion. You did a nice job relating the Biblical account to real life today. You also did a nice job of bringing the topic in while delivering a great message.

03/13/12
Excellent job on this story; It kept my interest from the first word. You need to make certain when you submit your entry that there are double spaces between paragraphs. Makes for easier reading. Good job on this!
03/15/12
Very good! I visualized military units from possibly World War II to the present, then had to step back into the Old Testament days of Gideon!