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03/01/12
Oh you got me in the beginning (I thought the MC was a woman) :)

What a wonderful story of true love in a marriage, and you told it beautifully!

Very...VERY good work!
Loved it! Great story of God's love in a marriage relationship. The flow was good and the ending lovely.
A red mark, however, the paragraph that begins "Thank you." The MC's reply should be a new paragraph. Helps the clarity.
Good job. Keep on keeping on.
03/02/12
Lovely story demonstrating support, commitment and sublte loving encouragement.

Nice job. You did a great job with this piece.

Thank you. God Bless~
This is a sweet story of love and encouragement. I especially enjoyed it because in my experience men aren't usually empathetic to what goes on in a female brain. Sometimes I think they are more boggled. But this showed a real meeting of the minds.

My red ink is tiny. Instead of empathy look, it should be empathetic. It seemed a contrast when she got up from the desk without hesitation but moved slowly, and lastly creped I think should have been crept
unless I missed something entirely else.

Encouragement between a couple like this was spot on the topic. It left me with a feel good feeling and a desire to aim for that in my own relationships.