The Official Writing Challenge
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03/01/12
I enjoyed this story very much. As Christians, we need to use every opportunity to reach others for Christ and this was a great example of how to do it.

Great work!
Right on topic, a story that held me all the way. Encouraging. Just one comment, you might want to do some research on point-of-view. The MC would not see over the phone, a person slumping down in their chair or tears in their eyes. You could still relay the same idea of the emotion through a sound the MC heard. I am not certain on this but check it out.
03/02/12
This was a well written story replete with emotions and Christian values. I loved the entire entry.

Beautiful job with showing "encouragement" rather than just "writing it." Your descpritions helped to lend an honest true to life story develop.

Thank you.

God bless~
03/04/12
I really enjoyed this story and the way the events unfolded. It had an air of mystery which made it a fun read.