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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Experiment (02/16/12)

TITLE: The Christian Experiment
By George McVey
02/21/12


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Kris couldn’t help overhearing the waitress as she chatted with the people behind him. “I am just so tired, you know? With Mother in the hospital losing blood and the doctors not being able to find where it’s coming from, I’m at my wits end. On top of that I have to show up for work, all the while feeling guilty that I am not there for her. When I get off I go sit with her and all she can say is ‘I want to go home’. To be honest I think we’d both get more rest if she was home. I don’t know what to do anymore.”

The words of Pastor George’s last sermon came back to Kris then: “Why not give it a chance and experiment with your Christianity. See what it can do in the real world? The worst that would happen is nothing would change. The best that could happen is the lost would get found and Christians would feel empowered to try even greater experiments with their Christian faith. Come on People of the Cross! Let’s begin the Christian Experiment!” Part of him wanted to do just that, but another part of Kris thought “Not now, not here not during lunch with the boss! But what if it worked? What if he prayed for that lady's mother and she got healed? Not just one but two lives might get touched for Christ.”

But if she didn’t, he would look like a religious nut in front of his boss. His boss knew he was a Christian; that was the reason they had lunch together once a week. His boss was curious about his faith and wanted to talk about Christianity and try to understand it. Pastor George’s again sounded in his mind: “Faith without works is dead.” Time to start the experiment Kris decided.

Seeing the waitress headed their way Kris swallowed the lump in his throat and turned to his boss. “Mister Reynolds, for the last few weeks we’ve had lunch and you’ve asked me a ton of questions about my faith. Today I am going to show you what I have been talking about.”

“What do you mean?”

As the waitress approached the table Kris looked straight into his boss eyes “Just watch.”

“Hi fellas, my name is Susan and I’ll be your waitress today. Can I get you a drink or are you ready to order?’

“Actually Susan, I couldn’t help but overhear what you said about your mother. Do you mind if I pray for her before we order?”

With tears in her eyes Susan nodded, “Please do.”

Kris, taking her hand, bowed his head and called out to God. “Father I know you heard Susan’s heart cry the same as me. I ask now in the name of your Son Jesus and in the Authority he gave to his believers that you reach down and heal Susan’s mom right now. Let the bleeding stop and the doctors release her today. Let her come home like she and Susan both want. Oh, and God, give Susan peace till then. Amen.”
Kris reached in his pocket and took out one of his business cards jotting his cell number on the back. He gave it to Susan with a smile, “When the doctor releases your mom today I want you to call and let me know. Okay? I think I will have the special with a coke.”

Staring at him with shock, Mister Reynolds ordered the same thing. Susan thanked him as she went off to place their order. Kris explained about the challenge his pastor had given to try the Christian Experiment this week. That led to more questions from the boss and the lunch hour flew. They got their checks and headed to the cashier.

As Kris and Mister Reynolds got in their car to leave Susan came flying out of the restaurant yelling for Kris to wait “This God of yours, I want to know him! The hospital just called and said they are releasing my mother, her bleeding stopped about an hour ago. They’re letting her come home.”

Mister Reynolds added, “I’m ready too, Kris. This experiment of yours is very convincing.”
Right there in the parking lot the Christian Experiment bore the result of two new believers.

“This is what it’s all about,” Kris thought, “I wonder what’s next?”
The answer came just as quickly, “Look for the next opportunity to continue the experiment.”
“Okay God Show me.”


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Nancy Bucca 02/23/12
I really enjoyed this story; it encouraged me to be bolder in my faith just like Kris was with his. Plus, it had the topic written all over it. Good job.
CD Swanson 02/24/12
"Faith without works is dead." I have always loved this passage...and this whole story solidified what we are to do as Christians. God boldy and seek and "show."

What an act of faith by "showing" - so powerful. I loved it. Thanks for this.

God Bless~
CD Swanson 02/24/12
That was supposed to read
"Go boldy" but somehow God came out! Shows you He is always on my mind! LOL.

God Bless~
Jennifer Porter02/24/12
Dear Kris,
I loved your article! What a beautiful testimony to God's power and love. Thank you for allowing God to use you as his conduit to touch not one but three people. Great story, and you delivered it with ease!
Jennifer Porter02/24/12
I just realized Kris is probably a fictional name. Regardless, you delivered your story well.
Jody Day 02/25/12
Beautifully done. This one made me cry. Good job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/25/12
This is a great idea and a touching story. It's not an easy thing to do for sure.

You may want to do more showing than telling. For example in the first sentence you told that Kris over hear instead show by doing something like this Kris leaned back in his chair and tilted his head as the waitress' words drifted into his ear.

You may also want to make the paragraphs a tad smaller, especially with a short story it's nice to have that extra white space.

I so enjoyed your message. You were right on topic. It was a good beginning that draws the reader in right away.
Kathleen Langridge03/01/12
A teaching, encouraging story. Believe me the showing will get easier as you continue writing. Though I still struggle with it. Good job.
CD Swanson 03/01/12
Congrats on your well deserved placment! I enjoyed your story. look forward to more.

God Bless you~
Nancy Bucca 03/01/12
Congratulations on your highly commended. It's well deserved.