The Official Writing Challenge
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10/26/05
There were several storm stories this week and it was nice to read one from a fresh perspective. Good job on being creative and showing another side of things! I liked how it seemed you were talking in the present tense. It made it feel like the reader is there as you experienced it. :)
10/27/05
This was very timely, and I thank you and those young people for being the Lord's hands and feet in this service. The only thing I would advise is to watch your use of verb tense. You began with past tense (had, was, -ed ending verbs) and by the end of your account the tense had changed to present (is, verbs with -s endings, etc.) I tracked with the retelling of your service anyway. Good job!