The Official Writing Challenge
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Obviously, a subject with which you are familiar. You will hear often the phrase 'show don't tell.' Let your characters show the feelings not tell about them. If you look it up on the Internet there are many examples and helps. Also, you might get a better response from the subject matter if the Divine Appointments were not featured as 'targets.' A good reminder that your title should not be at the top of your article it should only be in the 'Title Box.' This article has good potential. Keep going.
02/16/12
A compelling story-and well written. I truly enjoyed this, and the ending especially. It made me smile. Nice job. God Bless~
02/16/12
Good story. I wonder how many opportunities I miss every day?...much food for thought.
I liked this story a lot. I think that you did a wonderful job developing the character. I was surprised she wasn't willing to share with the one person who reached out to her. Makes me wonder how many missed opportunities there r in each day.
I meant to give tiny red ink. At the beginning you doubled-spaced between paragraphs but once you got to the dialog, you stopped doing that. Hitting preview before you hit submit will show you what the piece will look like. I did truly enjoy this story.
It's true, sometimes we can't see the forest because of all the trees. My only suggestion, other than the paragraph spacing would (for the reader's benefit) distinguish between actual dialogue and inner dialogue. It can be confusing for the reader if they aren't sure whose thoughts are whose. A fairly easy way to do this is to italicize the inner thoughts to separate them from those spoken. Hope that makes sense, but you did a fine job with the subject!
02/18/12
I thoroughly enjoyed your story. It kept my attention and challenged me to stay focussed through my day on what God has told me. And the ending is so typical of our "eleventh hour" God
02/23/12
CONGRATULATIONS~! Well done!
Whoo- hoo! Congratulations my friend! I knew you could do it! I'm so proud of you. This week you will be writing for level 2! Happy Dance!
02/23/12
Blue Ribbon for beautiful writing!
02/23/12
Great story from a great encourager of others through your words and deeds. Congratulations on your well deserved blue ribbon.
02/23/12
Congratulations! God Bless~
02/23/12
Congratulations!
02/23/12
Wow, this is great. Congratulations on a well deserved first place!