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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Agreement/Disagreement (01/19/12)

TITLE: Swept Away
By Catherine Maher
01/25/12


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My sister, Ruth tends to be one of those people who view life from the deep end of the pool. You might say her style is to spring high and dive as deep as she can. Surface talk, while sometimes necessary, was never her favorite place to land. With Bible, notebook and loyal sister by her side, Ruth thrived on going deep to find buried treasures in the word.

On one side, it’s a blessing because she has more opportunities to learn some of the deep secrets in the word. On the other side it can be a burden, because not everyone around is always as excited or willing to hear more. If she’s not careful, that can lead to feelings of loneliness. Going deep with God is wonderful, but I’ve seen how too much isolation can become a burden.

All it takes for Ruth is to hear one word she is unsure of. Then this wave comes along creating a desire in her to find out what she doesn’t know. She’s not going to be satisfied just thinking she knows what it means. She has to know what she doesn’t know. So she cross references it, googles it and finds it in the dictionary. While everyone else is reading on, she’s stuck on that one word. Sometimes she misses what is being read or said because she’s stuck elsewhere.

Some of our friends think it’s good, others think it’s not so good. They think she’s not paying attention. But she is paying attention, just to something or someone else. Most of the time, that one distracting word turns out to be God calling to Ruth.

That is what happened last Sunday, sitting in church. We were both listening intently to the message, jotting down notes and scripture references. All of a sudden, with just one word, Ruth was in over her head again, with thoughts whirling around, searching for some significant meaning or definition she could assign to the word, something she could grab onto and stay afloat. There was no hidden wisdom in the recesses of her mind this time though, so she decided to circle the word and tuck it in her Bible for later. Finally we both re-focused on the Pastor, reassuring each other that we would not miss another exciting conclusion.

Arriving back home, Ruth headed for Dictionary.com, keying in her mystery word of the morning. Her heart quickened with anticipation, recalling how Pastor referred to how God wants us to answer the Clarion Call on our lives. That’s what awakened her soul, beckoning her to take another Sunday morning dive.

Clarion: clear and shrill, the call of a battle trumpet, definite, inspiring, loud, ringing, stirring sound.
“That’s exactly what I was feeling!” Ruth squealed with excitement. “My Clarion Call is to go deep into the word that God Himself highlights for me.

While some might find it annoying to always discuss things more in depth, deep is my call. Besides, I have found some who enjoy hearing about the treasures I find when I dive. And as our Pastor said, we are to listen to that stirring within…because it’s God calling.”

Should you find yourself sitting next to Ruth on a Sunday morning and notice a glazed look come over her, don’t worry, she’s just drifting over towards the diving board in her mind, contemplating another dive into the Lord again. She’s decided to answer the call of the moment at the moment. Depending on which side of the pool you open your umbrella, you may agree or disagree with her choice. You’ll always find me basking in the son light of her latest revelation.

Just like Ruth in the Bible, my sister gleans after all the other reapers are done working in the field. She picks up the morsels the others leave behind. To her, those morsels are the choicest in the whole field.

“Deep calls to deep in the roar of your waterfalls; all your waves and breakers have swept me over.” Psalm 42:7 KJV


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CD Swanson 01/26/12
I simply loved this entry! This was so beautifully written. I truly enjoyed this descriptive piece, with a lovely message.

I cannot get enough of the word, so I can relate to "Ruth." Nicely done - this should do well in the ratings.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/12
I enjoyed this differences between sisters. I can totally relate to Ruth. I keep my dictionary by my side ready to look up a new word. I almost wish you had started with the paragraph about what happened last Sunday. It was an exciting one and would draw the reader in quicker as you did more showing than telling. Describing the actions and what the characters look like is a great way to draw your reader into your story. You've done a nice job. Keep writing!
Judy Sauer 01/27/12
Interesting story, especially the analogy of the diving board. Ruth is another me - how'd you get into my head?

I didn't get the umbrella connection. Guess you were referencing an outdoor pool? In my mind's eye, as I read your story, an indoor pool image stuck in my head.

Nice work.
Jennifer Suchey01/28/12
Ruth needs an iPhone! She can then look up a word in her dictionary app at any moment. ;)

I agree with the comments of more showing and less telling. I like the way this article explains it. http://www.dailywritingtips.com/show-dont-tell/

Also, make sure you vary your sentences to add interest. Your first three sentences are all about the same length as are many of your sentences throughout.

I was always taught to capitalize the Word when referring to the Bible. It would be especially good in your story, as you do mention a "word" she wants to look up more than once and there could be confusion for the reader (there actually was for me).

I love this sentence: Should you find yourself sitting next to Ruth on a Sunday morning and notice a glazed look come over her, don’t worry, she’s just drifting over towards the diving board in her mind, contemplating another dive into the Lord again.

Nice writing. :)
Cynthia Carter01/29/12
This was wonderful.
Theresa Santy 01/30/12
I enjoyed this essay and I have to say, I would enjoy diving in deep with Ruth on any day.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/11/12
Congratulations for placing 6th in level 1!