The Official Writing Challenge
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This was a very well written story...I enjoyed it and loved the ending. This would have been good in last weeks embarrassment category too! Nicely done.
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This is a great story. It is perfect for a devotion. My biggest suggestion would be don't give away the ending with the title. You did a great job writing on topic and I giggled at the end.
A very relatable story. Find ways to shift your words around to prevent Using the word "I" to start most sentences. There were a few run on sentences.

When driving the car to the car shop, I was hoping to read more descriptive words about the MC's reactions to the car. Wording that expose feelings give character to the story.

You kept my interest. Nice work.
Nice job on a story that definitely fits the topic.

Make sure you start a new paragraph each time dialogue changes (see your last paragraph).

I was wondering if the MC would make a point (as I would have) that the they shouldn't have made a key for a truck that needs a microchip! They should have known. ;) However, I like the ending and the fact that they grinned at the end and formed a positive connection.

Good job!!!
Very nice article. Would be a great read in a men's Christian magazine.
This hit on such a common problem - a situation is ignited when a simple solution settles it. A key! How clever! Good job! God bless!
Congratulations on your ribbon! Nice job
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