The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/05
Wow! I didn't expect that ending! Way to sock it to your readers! If you clean up the tenses in this piece, it would be superb! Thanks for this departure from the usual.
10/29/05
ditto with the sock em comment.. A great ending and message.. Thanks for sharing.

djdeb
10/30/05
Good story, very interesting. Watch the POV shifts. Loved the ending.