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01/19/12
I think this is really lovely. Well done!
01/19/12
You have done a good job of describing the angst a boy feels if his friends criticize his parents. Who is right? A good reminder of who really matters.
01/20/12
Beautiful job with the topic. I truly enjoyed this story packed with an important message. Nicely done. God bless~
01/20/12
Nicely done! Good luck!
01/21/12
Love the way this article shared mixed emotions!
I enjoyed this. To make it really crisp work on verb tense usage. Cheers!
This is a great kid's story. I really enjoy children's story when the kid figures out the answer himself. Often adults will write that a hero or heroine is an adult but kids relate to stories where kids are the good guy with the answers.

A tiny bit of red ink. In the third line, you use the verb was. Normally with a singular subject was would be correct, but the word if changes things. Check out thus page. Check out this web page http://www.englishforums.com/English/UsageOfWereVsWas/gvmb/post.htm
It is a small, nitpicky thing but something I learned from feedback from other writers. Nice job, overall.
01/26/12
Nicely done! Congrats!
God bless~