The Official Writing Challenge
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10/24/05
Very sweet and tender story. Good dialog and visualization. Very truthful analogy of raindrops being like God's blessings. Well done. God Bless and keep writing.
10/24/05
Loved this story. I am so glad mama didn't yell at him for squashing the tomatoes. :D
10/28/05
Great lesson! I love where you compared God coming down to us like the rain. You need to work on your quotation marks and there were a few words used incorrectly but you have a great story telling ability! I had to laugh about killing the tomatoes!
10/30/05
Good story. Find an illustrator, put pictures with this, simplify a couple of words, and you have a wonderful children's story.