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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: rain (10/17/05)

TITLE: Perfect Timing
By Christopher Gearhart
10/21/05


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“Dad, I’m scared.” said Michael as he peered out his car window. The skies had just opened up and the sound of pounding rain was now drowning out the radio.

“Pretty wet out there, huh buddy?” replied his Dad. Ever since he watched an episode of Storm Stories a few months back, Michael has been both fascinated with, and terrified of inclement weather of any kind.

“Do you think there’ll be a tornado?” asked Michael.

“In Connecticut? I don’t think so, son. We haven’t had a tornado in years,” said his Dad.

“But it could happen?”

“There’s maybe a one in a gazillion chance, I’d say.”

“So there is a chance there could be Tornado?” Michael asked with a quavering voice. At age 8, Michael was a master interrogator.

“The weatherman said just rain today,” replied his Dad, “so there’s nothing to be worried about.” That seemed to put Michael’s mind at ease a bit. But when he looked in the rear view mirror and saw the pensive look on his son’s face, he knew this conversion wasn’t over just yet.

“Why does God make it rain so much?” Michael asked. “Why doesn’t He just make every day a nice, sunny day?”

“Well,” said his dad, “what do you think would happen to the plants and trees if they never got a drink of water?”

“I guess they would die.” answered Michael.

“And what would happen to the fish if the oceans and rivers dried up, or the animals in the wilderness if the streams dried up?”

“They would die too.” Michael said with a touch of sadness in his voice. “Dad, I know what you’re going to ask next, and I know the answer to that question too: we would die.”

Michael’s dad couldn’t suppress a smile. “So Michael, why doesn’t God make every day a nice, sunny day?”

“Because God knows the things that we need, and He gives them to us when we need them, including rain." Michael said in a singsong voice.

“How did you get to be so smart?” asked his dad. “Did you know that Jesus said the same thing?”

“Really? I’m even smarter than I thought!” Michael said, eliciting another smile from his dad.

“Well, not in so many words, but here’s what He said in the book of Luke (chapter 12, verse 24 , NIV): ‘Consider the ravens: they do not sow or reap, they have no storeroom or barn; yet God feeds them. And how much more valuable are you than the birds!’ ”

“Dad?” Michael said in mischievous tone.

“Yes, buddy?”

“If I’m more valuable to God than the birds, then I guess my needs are more important too. And one thing that I really need to get is the latest…”

Just then, as if by magic, Michael’s car window rolled down by itself, sending a torrent of water into the back seat. “Oh man, I’m getting soaked back here!” screamed Michael. His dad rolled the window back up, trying to contain his laughter.

“Dad!”

“God’s timing is perfect, buddy,” said Michael’s dad, “and mine isn’t too bad either!”


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Denise Stanford10/24/05
Beautiful character development, a well rounded reminder.
Linda Miller10/24/05
Oh this is good - really good. I loved it and it made me smile. Thank you.
D. Phenes10/24/05
I loved the story was all dialogue.. what a nice ending too.
Jan Ackerson 10/25/05
The characters of both dad and son have very realistic dialog in this cute story! One minor thing you can work on is writing dialog without using words like "said" and "replied." You did it, for example, when you wrote Michael’s dad couldn’t suppress a smile. “So Michael, why doesn’t God make every day a nice, sunny day?”
That's perfect, and it is easier on your reader. Well done!
terri tiffany10/28/05
Cute story and great dialogue between the two of them!! Nice writing:)
dub W10/30/05
As mentioned above take out many of the affirmations, and replace them with beats (action). You have a knack for a story, keep up the good work.