The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful character development, a well rounded reminder.
10/24/05
Oh this is good - really good. I loved it and it made me smile. Thank you.
10/24/05
I loved the story was all dialogue.. what a nice ending too.
10/25/05
The characters of both dad and son have very realistic dialog in this cute story! One minor thing you can work on is writing dialog without using words like "said" and "replied." You did it, for example, when you wrote Michael’s dad couldn’t suppress a smile. “So Michael, why doesn’t God make every day a nice, sunny day?”
That's perfect, and it is easier on your reader. Well done!
10/28/05
Cute story and great dialogue between the two of them!! Nice writing:)
10/30/05
As mentioned above take out many of the affirmations, and replace them with beats (action). You have a knack for a story, keep up the good work.