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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Spam (not the meat) (11/03/11)

TITLE: What's That Smell?
By Julie Andre
11/16/11


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What’s that Smell?

As a child my dad use to love to cook us breakfast. He would surprise us with different culinary creations. Some mornings I would get up and say, “What’s that smell?” My dad would respond with pride, “that’s the SPAM I fixed for you.” He thought that made a great breakfast treat! I was not as enthused as he was. There was something about the smell, look, and taste of SPAM that did not excite me. Of course, I was told if I complained that I needed to think of all the starving children around the world. So guess what? I ate the SPAM trying not to throw up!
Forty years had passed since my last spam breakfast. Thank goodness! Shortly after my husband and I married, my husband decided to surprise me with breakfast. One morning when I entered the kitchen, I recognized an unpleasant odor.” OH NO! I said to myself,” Don’t tell me he has fixed me SPAM as a surprise.” Just as my dad had years earlier was filled with pride for his breakfast treat, my husband’s chest was bursting too. He had fixed a special breakfast for me. I did not want to hurt his feelings yet I didn’t want to tell him how great the SPAM breakfast was. If I did that, he would think SPAM was one of my favorite breakfast foods. I could barely tolerate the look, and smell, and taste of SPAM. My perception of SPAM is it is a junk food. I do my best to avoid junk food. After enduring a few SPAM breakfasts, I did let my husband know I am not in favor of SPAM as a food for me. He now only fixes that smelly piece of food for himself. YEAH!
Until recently, I thought SPAM was a rather disgusting food. To me it was junk. Since then I have learned a new definition for SPAM. In computer lingo to me it means junk mail. This mail goes through a filter where it is filed as SPAM. I usually do not look at my SPAM mail. For me it is a waste of time. It causes clutter and confusion for me. My mind gets on mental overload with too many trivial pieces of information. Instead of focusing on the important things in life, I get sidetracked. My mind becomes a battlefield with Satan vying for my attention. Mental clutter , and distractions keep my mind as active as a gerbil in a cage---nonstop motion.
In order to deal with the mental SPAM, I use the Word of God as my defense. When I realize that my mind is on overactive, I then begin to cite Bible verse out load. Taking that action moves me into a calmer state of mind. I begin to experience that peace that passes all understanding. So excuse me for now. It’s time to go clear the mental SPAM that surfaced while I was diligently writing this piece about SPAM…


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CD Swanson 11/17/11
Good job! I enjoyed this piece. I especially liked the clever ending:

"So excuse me for now. It’s time to go clear the mental SPAM that surfaced while I was diligently writing this piece about SPAM… "


God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/11
This is a sweet story. I could definitely relate to eating something so as not to hurt one's feelings. I like the way I could almost smell the SPAM cooking!

You did get around to talking about the computer term, but it felt like it should almost be two different stories. The first part was animated and light. I think this might work in a devotion. Telling a personal story then applying how it has changed your life is a great idea.

You also could implement a few little things that would help make your piece even better. Try double-spacing between paragraphs. Also get a good proofreader who would help you catch little things like having an extra quotation mark. Also make sure you start a new paragraph each time a different person is speaking.(The FW forums are an excellent resource for finding critique groups and there are writing tips, as well as the criteria the judges use for scoring each entry)

You had many areas that you were really good at. I liked your beginning, it caught my attention and made me curious.

Your message is very good. It's something most people can relate to. Your writing is strong and you are quite expressive. Keep writing and spread the messages God puts on your heart.
Bryan Rudolph11/28/11
Spam - not the meat - is to be the topic. Wonder why I kept thinking of the meat? The flip to computer and then mental SPAM seemed to spring from an unrelated direction to the breakfast talk.

The imagery though is quite intense, regardless of how you led the reader along. That is good.