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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)

TITLE: Windows from Heaven
By Jennifer Hill
10/19/11


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I’m a romantic at heart. I still believe in till death do us part. I know a couple who did just that, my grandparents, I knew them once as “Pop-Pop Jim” and as he called her affectionately his, “Miss. Patty.” They were married on August 3rd, 1946 after he returned from World War II. I could share the trials, victories, sorrows and joys they faced together, what made their marriage a true love story. All that matters is they were committed to the end. They raised three children and had a dozen grandchildren. They even saw two great-grandchildren before they passed away only eight months apart from each other.

This story is about them and a strange encounter I had on what would have been their 60th wedding anniversary. It happened over the internet. Some say I was dreaming. I’m not so sure. It had been a busy day. On their 50th I took flowers to their grave, where they lay side by side. Now a wife and the mother of four, I hadn’t had time to drive to their little country town.

It was after ten and I sat alone on the couch, laptop in hand. Missing days gone by, I googled their names, silly I know…they had been gone for more than a decade. Nothing came up of course, but oh how I’d love to hear from Grandma again. To feel her warmth and Grandpa’s sense of humor, together they made some of my best memories.

I remembered I needed to work on my Bible study so I switched engines and headed towards the gateway to God’s word. Soon I was reading about Heaven’s promise, and how Jesus has gone to prepare a place for us. Suddenly a notice popped up on my screen, a Patricia wanted to live chat with me.

“Patricia?” I whispered to myself. I yawned trying to remember where we may have met. I didn’t easily give out my contact info. The computer urgently flashed at me again. I clicked on it and from there I was taken to an almost iridescent screen.

“Hi Katelyn. How are you?”

“Who is this?”

“Grandma”

Yeah, right. Sure I thought. I checked the top of the screen and it said Windowsfromheaven.com and as I read it, a peace fell over me.

“Oh, how I’ve missed you. There’s so much to tell you, so much to ask. How’s Grandpa?”

“He’s good, out fishing in the Crystal Sea. Before you ask, no bait, no hook-the fish hop on eventually and then he tosses them back in. God knew how much men loved fishing. Your son loves to go too.”

“My son?”

“Yeah, you were right, the baby you lost. He loves to go out with my Jim. They have a ball. He helps me pick strawberries like you used too. He looks much like your other children.”

“Oh my, how I’ve wondered.” I typed, tears in my eyes. The moment was surreal. As she shared this small window of heaven with me, I took in the view and treasured it in my heart.

“I call him Jamie.”

“We know, we do too. He can’t wait to see you.”

“Me too.” Tears poured from my eyes.

“Honey, you’re not going to need those here. So don’t practice so much there. That life is short, I know it sounds clique but it’s so true. For us it will be like tomorrow and you will be here. Live well, live blessed.”

“Grandma, I love you. Tell them both I love them please.”

“We know and we love you too.”



I felt my husband touch my shoulder, whispering, “Honey, It’s almost midnight.”

“I’ll be up in a minute.”

Glancing at the screen, I found it on the gateway page, with John 14:1-6. My eyes fell to verse three. ‘And if I go and prepare a place for you, I will come again and will take you to myself, that where I am you may be also.’ I smiled and thought what a wonderful dream.

I clicked the “x” at the top of the screen and as the computer shut down an image appeared on the screen. It was of a sparkly shore line and the silhouette of a man in a fedora with a fishing pole and a young boy in a baseball cap. Before I could save it the image was gone.

I sat a moment and then bowed my head and thanked God for windows and gateways possible only through Him.


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CD Swanson 10/22/11
This was simply beautiful! My gosh, I am wiping tears from my eyes! I can hardly believe I am the first to comment on this lovely, touching entry.

It was not only on topic, but it was a beautiful story, and had emotional moments throughout. I loved it! Great job!

And the ending withe the image, was the icing on the cake-great wrap-up!

God Bless you~
Rachael Severa 10/23/11
I do like this story. It is so touching.I think I enjoyed the part about the little boy waiting for you. I could fill what he was feeling.

Be careful about long sentences. There were sentences that could be condensed a little more, and the use of comma's.
Very nice. Good Job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/23/11
This was really outstanding! You hard a great flow and the ending was outstanding. The start went on a little too long about how much you missed your grandparents. I think that message was definitely conveyed in the comments with Grandma. You nailed the topic and even got creative with the familiar it was only a dream scenerio. I really believe something like this is possible because I had a similar "dream" when Mom died. The only suggestion I have are little ones like their is no period after Miss, and some of the sentences could have been tightened up a bit. Overall I think yon did a great job.
Beth LaBuff 10/23/11
Wow! What a beautiful, heartwarming story. Just imagining the conversation transports the reader to another plane. You give your reader tranquility and hope.
Linda Goergen10/26/11
I’m wondering if this is fiction or based on a true experience?? This was wonderful, I was glued to it! I could imagine a couple of my lost loved ones right there on the Crystal sea, fishing along with grandpa, as they too had loved fishing so much! The image of the picture fading was the perfect ending! Such a unique, heartwarming story! Just a terrific job!
Melinda Melton 10/30/11
Beautiful story. You did an outstanding job with the creativity and it was on topic.

I had difficulty with the first paragraph as far as the flow. I had to read it a couple of times. There is no period after Miss.

Good message and scripture. Great job, God Bless!
Edmond Ng 11/01/11
A nicely written piece that touches the heart. Well done!
Randy Foncree11/04/11
This was very heartwarming...excellant writing and mental imagery...I'm about to turn in and this will be on my mind as I enter dreamland...
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/05/11
Congratulations for ranking 12th in level one!
Colin Swann11/06/11
Congratulations on coming 12th in the rankings for your level. Well done!