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10/22/11
This was a truly a touching poem that pulled on my heart strings. Nicely put together, flowed well-and helf my interest throughout. I was praying they would connect, and couldn't wait to see if they did.

This was completely on topic and beautifully written and stirred my emotions. Well-done! Thank you. God Bless~
10/23/11
This was really lovely and I enjoyed your journey through life. You did a great job making it on topic. I knew where you were headed before you even mentioned search engines. However I think you went overboard trying to make sure it was on topic. You mentioned search way too often. I think one verse about Bing or Yahoo would have been more powerful. You did a great job with the message. As for crafting, I'mnot an expert at poetry but I did spot a few things like babies birth should have been baby's birth or babies' births. Some of the rhymes felt a little forced. You also used search or a version of it several times. Your start and finish was great. Yon hooked me right away and held my interest throughout. This was a very enjoyable read.
10/24/11
Your story was very compelling. I was so hoping for that outcome concerning your friend. What a reunion that must have been.
10/25/11
I enjoyed this too. I appreciate the considerable effort you extended and the story you successfully told.
10/27/11
You nailed the topic and told a beautiful story, with a definite beginning, middle, and end. It is difficult to be consistent with meter in a poem of this length, but it flowed nicely. Touching, engaging, beautiful...nice job!
10/27/11
I love the part when you give up your seraching to God. Psalm 37:4 comes to mind. My favorite part is when it shares how God seeks North to South and saves East to West. God covers everyone and everything when we give whatever it is up to Him. Thank you for sharing this!
11/05/11
Congratulations for ranking 15th in level one!
11/06/11
Congratulations! Well done!