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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Search Engine (10/06/11)

TITLE: Just Google It!
By Corinne Mann
10/18/11


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The alarm that sits on the top of my cherry wood night table is buzzing loudly in my ear, letting me know it is time to wake up and start a brand new day. Even though I try to ignore it in an effort to gain a few more minutes of sleep it just keeps buzzing and buzzing interrupting my peaceful rest. Finally….I reluctantly hit the button to turn off the annoying sound. It won and now I am up!

A little later after I am dressed and fully awake I go to each of my three children’s rooms one by one to wake them up for another day of their homeschooling routine. Matt will not want to get up for sure, he is at ten years of age still very much a deep sleeper and loves to get up later in the morning. Sarah and Melissa are at least early risers and do not usually give me any trouble when I wake them.

Less than a half hour after they get up and dressed we are all sitting around the kitchen table having breakfast when four-year-old Sarah pipes up and says “Oh no! God won’t be very happy today!” her eyes widened with concern as she spoke.

“Why won’t God be very happy today?” I asked her.

“Because we didn’t say our prayers yet and I already ate my some of my toast!” the worry was building up in her voice as she expressed her concerns with her blond curls starting to bounce a little.

“Sarah, it is okay we can pray now. Would you like to say the prayer this morning?” I said as I looked at the others signaling with my eyes that we needed to stop and get ready to pray.

“Mommy I would like to pray. I have a lot to say to God!” Sarah exclaimed.

“Melissa and Matt you have to put your forks down it is time to pray now. Dear my best friend Jesus. I’m sorry we started wrong. Bless my food. You should have some it taste good. Thank you for helping mommy cook because if you didn’t help her it would be burned like the toast yesterday. Help us to do our school good today. Mommy had to just Google it yesterday. Today our computer doesn’t work so I don’t know what she will do if she gets in trouble. Anyway Jesus you are my best friend so I know you will help me with my school today. Jesus I hope you have a good day. Are you happy I prayed? Bye I love you Jesus. Amen.”

“Sarah, I know Jesus is happy you prayed to him. He will be with all of us today as we do what we have to do. Thank you for reminding us we needed to seek him first. Now let’s finish our breakfast before you three get started in your schoolwork.”

After we were all done sitting around the table having breakfast and the kids were doing some of their work I went to my computer to begin working at finding out the problem it started having yesterday. With my laptop on the desk where my desktop computer sat I began using Google to search for the information I needed based on the error code that came up on my desktop screen.

My day went on like this on and off until the children went to sleep that night. As it turned out after many Google searches that found for me much needed information to aid in my fixing the problem with my computer I finally had it fixed!

Thank heavens for Google search engine! My favorite saying from now on will be “Just Google it!”


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Catherine Maher10/21/11
On topic was good.
I liked it from Sarah's POV and prayer. touching. leading the way to start their day.
Found it a little bit predictable, but good beginning and ending. The sentence " as it turned out after many google searches that found for me much help needed info to aid in my fixing the prob with computer I finally had it fixed." Reads to mixed up and poor punctuation. But still an endearing story.
CD Swanson 10/22/11
Good job of keeping on topic. I enjoyed the story and the characters. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/22/11
This is sweet. My favorite part in the little one's prayer. I could easily picture it.
Below is my opinion of the rating criteria based on a 0-5 scale.

Topic 2.2 Though you mentioned the search engine it didn't seem to be the main point of the story.

Creativity: 3.3 I really thought this was fresh and sweet.

Craft: 2.9 You had a few errors especially with commas. Remember to capitalize Mom when used as a name. You did a nice job with not being predictable.

Comphresion 3.3 You had a clear message that many can relate to.

Start: 3.6 I really enjoyed your beginning. It was descriptive and you did a good job establishing the setting and characters.

Ending: 2.9 It felt a little forced andnot as natural.

Flow 2.9 It almost felt like two different stories. I really enjoyed the beginning but the transition could have been smoother.

Publishable: 2.9 It needs some polishing. Ithink with some reworking it could make a good devotion. I think a devotional type format would be a great fit for you. You obviously have garnered a greatdeal Of wisdom from life and have a passionto share it:)
Linda Goergen10/25/11
This was an interesting read and so realistic, I felt like I was there, peeking in on the mom and kids! And little Sarah’s prayer was so precious! But as descriptive and entertaining as the beginning was, then ending, (the last three paragraphs) just lost all that and seemed to just be summed up abruptly. I know it could have been because of word count but it would have probably been better to cut some of the detail in the beginning about the alarm and use the words for a stronger ending. But all in all this was a very charming read and I enjoyed it! Blessings!
djvenzke Venzke 10/25/11
The child's prayer is precious. That story could stand on it's own, The topic seemed secondary, like it was tacked on the end to qualify your piece. Other than that, I like your style.
Beth LaBuff 10/25/11
My thought as I read, "A little child shall lead them." I could see much of this happening. :)
Edmond Ng 10/28/11
An enjoyable read! You've successfully portrayed the innocence of a child very well, and I particularly like the prayer by Sarah.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/05/11
Congratulations for ranking 13th in level one!
Colin Swann11/06/11
Congratulations! Well done!