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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Our Mutual Friend (not about the book) (09/15/11)

TITLE: More Than Friends...
By Robin Ocasio
09/22/11


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He will fail.

Yes, I know. I love him still.

He will be so far away.

It breaks my heart.

I love the time we spend together.

Indeed! It is the best, is it not?

Did you see how he laughed at the giraffe?

Or how he studied the hummingbird as it hovered in the air?

I liked his reaction to the big cats best of all. They purred so loud and slept so peacefully together.

I love his smile, and that twinkle in his eye.

It is such fun, just to watch him explore, discover the wonders of each new day.

I even like to watch him sleep.

It is amazing, that one so small, can bring so much joy….

... Or such heart aches.

Yes. Heart ache!

My heart aches too.

What can we do?

Stop him!

No, we can not.

He must choose.

He will.

He does not know all he will loose.

His heart will ache too!

Yes.

He does not understand.

No, it is hard for him.

He will die.

He will.

He does not know death.

I hate death!

The pain is great!

Beyond words….

I love him so.

Yes.

It will be time soon.

Too soon!

There he is.

He is too young to die!

Yet he will.

I will miss him.

As will I.

He will miss us.

He will.

His heart will long for us.

Yes.

I must do something.

We will.

It is decided.

He is our friend.

Our mutual friend….

He will not be able to make it back to us.

We will go to go him.

He will run, hide.

It is the way of death.

It hurts.

We will go still, because we…

Love him so.

Yes.

It is time.

It is done. He is fallen.

The separation is terrible!

He has chosen.

So have we.

Let us go.

It is time to begin a new work.

To bring him back.

For Forever!

Eternity waits for no one.

But not all!

So Sad!

Justice must rule.

All will choose.

The price is great.

It will cost our life.

His if we do not.

I can not bear that.

We have no life with out him.

No, our love is too great.

It is worth it, we love him so.

I go now.

We have much work to do.

He will be more than a friend.

He is, my…. Son,

Forever!


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/22/11
This is nice. At first I thought it was a mother talking about her son, then realized it was about Jesus.
Jennifer Hill09/28/11
I know this is about Jesus. I like the story of Him being a babe, and then giving His life by choice for us. It is a simple story of the Greatest Gift ever given. Well done. I'm just not sure who is talking- at first I thought it was Mary and Joseph, then God and the Holy Spirit? or Angels? clue me in after Thursday or if someone else has a take on it? I think it is written from a heavenly view because of how time passes. Thanks:)
Linda Goergen09/28/11
I had thoughts almost exactly like Jennifer!! I also knew right away Jesus was the subject and at first I too thought it was Mary and Joseph talking…but the more I read I thought no, maybe God and an angel…but then I came to believe it to be God and the Holy Spirit… hopefully we can find out for sure! LOL Very interesting presentation!!
Robin Ocasio 09/29/11
Twas the God head speaking together regarding.... Adam (mankind - fall & redemption)