The Official Writing Challenge
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This is beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes. I felt that you were talking right to me.

One of the things I struggle with when I write poems is having the right rhythm. I noticed some lines had 5 syllables and others had 9 or 10. It helps me to count them out on my finger, but I've been told there are programs on the internet that will do it for you.

Rhythm aside, this was absolutely beautiful and had chills running down my back. There are so many lonely, sad people out there that will be inspired by your words.
09/27/11
Very uplifting poem for the hurting! Good job. Enjoyed!
10/20/11
I have been a Christian for many years and like to think that I am mature at times in my faith. Even so, there are times when even I need to hear someone else say as you did in this poem, "I use to fight those demons", and "please don't quit your trying". This is a precious plea from one heart to another. My critique pen seems to be fresh out of ink on this one. It just won't write today. God bless you as you endeavor to share this precious poem.