The Official Writing Challenge
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09/23/11
Very well written. You make many good points in this piece, and it is not too long or wordy. Thanks.
This is a lovely poem with beautiful rhymes.

I think it might stand out more if you put the lines in a traditional verse, then double space between stanzas. Like this:


We share the occurrences of being born
And of being possessors of DNA inherited from Adam, number one.
We are all offered an Adamic DNA clean-out
By Jesus Christ, Godís begotten Son.

The words are lovely and the message divine. Keep writing, you have a passion that really shows n your words.

09/27/11
You have show the vision of your message quite well!
I like the meter and just the feel of your free verse poem. Very nice, right on topic and on message.