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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Where Angels Fear to Tread (not about the book) (09/08/11)

TITLE: Dark places
By Wesley Hesketh
09/09/11


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I run so fast to get nowhere
This hellís inside my head.
In this place all melted down
I am the living dead.

The wickedness spins all around
Makes me feel real sick
Iím reaching for my Saviour,
I hope He will come quick.

The pain within tears me apart
Shreds my very soul.
Keeping me from standing up,
I never can be whole.

The laughter thatís so evil
Bounces off my brain.
It even changes how I think
Itís driving me insane.

My blessed Father hears my cry
Calms my every fear.
Reaching down He makes things safe
And He holds me near.

Ever since I met our Lord
Heís been a major part.
He lives within my every move
The keeper of my heart.

ďIíll never leave thee nor forsake thee (Heb 13-5)
Remember what I said.
Iíll save you from that evil place
Where Angels fear to tread.Ē


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Rachael Severa 09/15/11
There are certainly a lot of places that evil will tread.

This is a nice poem. Right to the point.

Thank you. Godbless
Bonnie Bowden09/16/11
Great poem. I especially like the first line. I believe the dark recesses of the mind is the hardest place to escape.
CD (Camille) Swanson 09/16/11
Darkness is pushed out when the "Light" comes in. There is no place for darkness with our Savior's light. Nice job here, good message and powerful depiction. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/16/11
This is a powerful poem. I have felt exactly like this. It almost felt like you peeked into my head before writing this.

The only suggestion I might have is to work on the flow-try to have the same number of syllables and a pattern of stressed and unstressed words. This is something I really struggle with when I write poems and it's been mentioned to me before.

Personally I really enjoyed it and it spoke volumes to me. It has a great message and I could literally feel your anguish.
CD (Camille) Swanson 09/22/11
Congratulations. God bless~
Linda Goergen09/22/11
Congratulations on a well deserved win!