The Official Writing Challenge
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There are certainly a lot of places that evil will tread.

This is a nice poem. Right to the point.

Thank you. Godbless
09/16/11
Great poem. I especially like the first line. I believe the dark recesses of the mind is the hardest place to escape.
09/16/11
Darkness is pushed out when the "Light" comes in. There is no place for darkness with our Savior's light. Nice job here, good message and powerful depiction. God Bless~
This is a powerful poem. I have felt exactly like this. It almost felt like you peeked into my head before writing this.

The only suggestion I might have is to work on the flow-try to have the same number of syllables and a pattern of stressed and unstressed words. This is something I really struggle with when I write poems and it's been mentioned to me before.

Personally I really enjoyed it and it spoke volumes to me. It has a great message and I could literally feel your anguish.
09/22/11
Congratulations. God bless~
09/22/11
Congratulations on a well deserved win!