The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a wonderful message and was well written. If only more children/young adults would heed to those inner warnings life would be so much easier for them. Good Job, I enjoyed this. God Bless~
A story that NEEDS to be told over and over again. You are to be commended for the taking the challenge.

I would have liked to have seen the storyline (the ending from my perspective) addressed a little more fully to show how the relationship developed or not based on the characters' choice to make the "right" decision.
This was very steamy and entertaining in the beginning. I wasn't quite sure where you were headed.

The ending was a bit of a let-down. It seemed like you tried to hard to tie it up. For me it might have been more believable if youhad the guy storms off angry.

I liked the characters and the message is a great one. So many Christians can easily get carried away just "by kissing" Nicely done.
There's a great message here and you have some pretty good dialogue.

Adding a little more spacing will make your story more readable.

The end felt rushed and a little awkward - that word count limit can be tough!
Your story caught my attention right away and took me way back to a time and place in my life that I had forgotten. I like the simplicity of your story and the message in it. Good work.