The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow. Great use of imagery. I felt like I was right there. The situation hits home too...I take the bus to and from work, and when the it's running late in the afternoon, I go through the same mental gymnastics thinking about my son who is waiting for me to pick him up.
10/24/05
Well-written; I liked your "voice." Shari was very realistically portrayed.
10/25/05
Very descriptive and detailed. Be careful of overdoing the adjectives, but a very well done piece.
10/27/05
I was thinking at the end, that she may have gotten in the wrong vehicle..but nahhh. I stayed with it, and realized that it was on the more serious end, from mom's heart, and was still pleased. God bless ya, littlelight
10/28/05
I really liked this! I was there with her and have been many times! I wanted to scold her for not locking her car at a mall though!!LOL Great story..you took a tiny moment in a mother's life and expanded the emotion of it very well!
10/29/05
Awww, the sacrifice for a mother's love and dedication. Very well done.
10/30/05
There are times in a parents' life when they have to bite the bullet. This is one such time. As a Dad, I have had a few of these moments too and I must agree with other comments which said that they felt like they were right there with you. Great descriptions. Charley is a lucky kid.

Pauly