The Official Writing Challenge
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Cute story, I liked it and the whole meaing behind it. God bless~
Well done! Interesting, encouraging and realistic.
Please work on keeping your reader focused on one point of view, instead of switching back and forth between Emma's and Noah's thoughts and feelings.

I do like the way your characters dialogued. With a little work, you have an excellent story and a topic that plagues many of us - just how should our witness be seen by the world?

Thank you.
This is A good story. It has the potential to by great with a little polishing.

There are A few places where you need a quotation mark. You also jumped the POV between the 2 MCs.

But I really liked the characters and I can tell you are working on showing not telling. You wrote A story that both teens and adults well enjoy.
Liked this a lot. I could sense their emotions, his fears and frustrations, her caution and concern. You wisely leave us hanging, wanting to learn the rest of the story. Good job!